Peer critique for Cindy Delarosa

Yajing Zhang

Peer critique for Cindy Delarosa

Voice/Tone

Obviously, your voice is serious and informative. It feels very strong . After I read ,I can understand how this book show the blindness and the invisibility. I black and white both blindness. But they are blind in different way. The narrator is blindness because he doesn't know what happened about black people.

Audience:

The audience is for people who know the situation about black and white people conflict. This essay is for everyone who concerned and care about racism discrimination. And also, to let black people visible.

 Evidence:

Actually, you have sources to prove what your thought, but I think you should think more deeply. Maybe you should add more examples to your essay in order to make your essay more persuasive. Also, I think you should add some sources to support your opinions. The requirement is must have four-five outside sources.

Meaning:

This is an literary analysis essay. You wrote the good point about the novel. I think  you should write more idea in the essay.

Structure:

The structure is pretty good.  but I think you should work on your body paragraph. You can make your body paragraph have more detail. It is very impressive that you can analysis a novel very well. In addition, the requirement is 2000 words, I think you should work on it in order to achieve the requirement.

Organization:

The essay is well-organized , but I think you should add more ideas.

Overall thought:

Overall, you have a good analysis skill, you can analysis the novel very impressive, because it makes me feel fresh. You have very critic idea to make me feel you really thoughtful.