Yajing Zhang

Peer critique for Cindy Delarosa

Voice/Tone

In this article has strong voice about the racism. The author use a intensive narrative voice. I can also feel how author's sensation. Ex:" These trouble causing fuckers are my family!” It is very impressive shows that the tone is angry.

Audience:

There is no specific group of audience. It is for general audience. If it has, it might be some people that have racialism in their life. It can wake up them.

                                                                                                                                                   Evidence:

A lot of dialogs to provided in this article. It is really make sense that these dialogs show how this story to make process, and how can moved us.

Meaning:

It is meaningful and with deep impression.  To reduce the discrimination around the society because this phenomenon still exists.

Structure:

The plot, character, conflict, setting, style are completely appeared in the essay.                                                                                   The introduction described the details about the characters, plot is on flowing rhythm, characters are vivid, setting is clearly, climax is attracts readers, and conclusion is very emphasis.

Organization:

The essay is well-organized. The author gives sufficient details about the people, place, and events so that the reader gets a clear idea of how the author feels about. I think there is one paragraph so long, maybe you can cut for two paragraphs.

Overall thought:

Overall, this is an impressive narrative essay shows the racism. I like the conclusion because it is emphasis on the moral of the story.